A fresh start [Chapter 3]

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Re: A fresh start [Chapter 3]

This chapter appeared to be a bit rushed, however the story is coming along really well. Try to flesh out your characters a tad bit more. From the last chapter and this one all we know is that Nick is maybe 1-2 years older and is almost fluent in Chinese.

Besides those points you are doing superb with your story. I can’t wait to read more

Re: A fresh start [Chapter 3]

Long-winded is not your problem.

These three parts seem like the ‘catch-up’ before the real story gets going.