Lilly's Fate (A Diaper Dimension Story)

First, I would like to shout out @jackchef for the story idea. Second, I want to do something different with this one, I have seen this done on several forums but not here, so, here goes. Ideally, the community will chose the direction of the story through A/B answers to directional questions. Out of the first 5 votes, I will chose the direction that the story moves in. So let’s try it!

{Note: Starting on 7, the story starts. I have ditched the community choices function in favor of a smooth and quicker story}

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Lilly’s Amazon is a very mean Amazon. But, at the moment, she doesn’t have a name. (Note this is just a test question)

Choose here:

A: Cathy/Cathrine

B:Vick/Victoria

From what I’ve been told by @Penguin, there’s been a few attempts to try something like this in the past, and they never go anywhere, Heck a good chunk of our traffic is from guests, not users with accounts so the bulk of the people reading this won’t be able to vote anyway.

Thanks for letting me know, I would like to see how this pans out first.

I would also like to chip in some feedback as much as this seems like a cool idea I struggle to keep up with it but I’ll at least give you some help and vote

A.

I do think you could have a super successful story but it might be better if you write what you want it’s more likely to suit your style that way and you will enjoy the process as lot more and it will help your creative flow as well

Good day / evening, I have decided to remove the “community choices” tab from this story as I feel my story, per @Danni’s advice and my own impatience, and have decided to move forward with the story. As the storyline was @jackchef’s idea, I will honor his choice in the Amazon’s name being Cathy/Cathrine.

Prologue

[Begin phone call]

“Are the documents ready?”

“Yes, you should have no issues with the adoption.”

“Thank you Arthur.”

“Thats what you pay me for Ms. White.”

“Of course, but you have always done outstanding work.”

“Thank you Ms. White”

“How many times do I have to tell you? Call me Cathy.”

“Alright Ms… I mean Cathy.”

“Good, I will be in to sign the papers in the morning.”

“Sounds good. Goodnight Cathy.”

“Good night Arthur.”

[End phone call]

Cathy has dreamed of having her own little to take care of since she was a little girl. At age 33, she finally was able to fulfill this dream, buying her first crib, high chair, and most of all, a few big boxes of Comfie’s Crawler Diapers.

[Lilly’s side]

Being a free little was hard. You always have to look over your shoulder, there were always snatchers looking for littles to nab off the streets. Unfortunately, there are no laws in place to protect those littles, leaving them with little protection from the cruel world they find themselves in.

Lilly was like any other free little, struggling to make it in a world where people 4 feet taller than her were always treating her like she was a kid, degrading her around every corner. Looking over her shoulder was another ‘perk’ of being free. You never knew when someone was going to try to nab you off the street, bring you to an adoption center, and make your life disappear, as if you never existed at all. It was that fateful morning of March 7th that exactly that happened.

Suddenly, as she is walking down the street, Lilly feels the sharp prick of a needle enter her neck, and then, nothing.

{Note: I am open to all constructive critique. I would like to improve my writing after all.}

I think you have a good basis for a start here that’s for sure I like the idea that you from the outset make it clear of Cathy’s intentions by buying crawler diapers i how they are exclusively what her new adoptee wears I would love to see longer chapters I think that would help you in building the story line I think short chapters can sometimes make it seem very broken but that’s totally up to you as an author. But all in all a good start and as someone who always has wanted to see the main character portray a mean mommy I’m excited

The short chapter was just for the Prologue. I plan to have a much lengthier chapter 1. Thank you for the tips!

Perfect I look forward to that

I am also interested!
But I also recommend that you choose the chapters significantly longer, about 2 - 2.5k words are a good choice for writing beginners.
So you keep track of what you write and notice very soon very quickly when you are no longer in harmony in the writing style.

BUT…
I confess, I will lose interest very quickly if your goal in this story is to make Lilly just a baby, with endless diaper changes, bathing and breastfeeding.

I would it love, if Cathy was a strictly sadistic amazon.

Your start is a nice idea what you has …

greeting Nicole